My story writing plan & story

Plan:

Verbs doing/ACTION WORDS
nouns: Naming words
as bright as staining at the sun for 3 min
bang boom pop bang ziz boom.

Story:

Bang Boom Pop Bang Ziz Boom as the lighting struck. Maddy Steph and I were in the lounge when it happened it was so bright it was like staining at the sun for 3 min (ouch). The thounder was chutting behind us it was like someone banging there hand on the table(but louder) The hale was pitting on the roufh and neary ever secound was a bang. Then all of a stound we herd a drip drip drip what was it so steph said "Dave what is that driping noise" Dad draged him self out of bed like a snake slithing along the groung dad pulled the certons open and right there dad let out a screm "AAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRR" "what was it i said to my self" "what dad" *the water is dripping off the roof we all went to our towels and that was the the lovely storm

*The water was dripping like a waterfall but in side, so we all went to get our towels and that was the lovely storm inside our house.

Math movies.

What did I learn: Heaps of different strategies
What did I do well: Explained my self good

What is my next learning step: Is to learn them faster

One of my best piece of writing

When I am sitting here all I can see is Teecee writing so fast she is like Zia running but only with her fingers. Teecee has a frown on her face, her hands are like little cheaters, and I still don't know what to write. Emma's pen is really cool it has a little maze inside it. How cool is that. Libby is like a writing machine, she is writing crazy-fast. Anyway I still do not know what to write. Everyone is frowning they all look so funny. Britt is biting the bottom of her lip and the timer just stopped so bye.

What did I learn: That don't have to many alliteration together.
What did i do well: I did had some good similes.
What is my next learning step: A few more describing words.

My Best Vis Lang

What did I learn: That is looks nice when you blend colours.
What did I do well: Have Bright Bold colours.
What is my next learning step: To not colour in hard over my writing and blend my colours.

Spelling Test Term 3

I think I did all right i could of done much better if I took more time on the word but I improved and did better then last time.